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       I was born and grown in Trang province. There, I stayed with my family. When I graduated high school, I came to study at Suan Dusit Rajabhat University. I have been here several times but this time I came here alone. First time when I came here,I must came here alone. No family is with me and I feel afraid. But I think everyone can live, I must can live too. And I hope that liveng in a big city makes me to learn something that I have never gotten it in my life. The first thing that changes in my life is I must to de everything by yourself such as cooking, laundry, iron clothes etc. The second thing, Bangkok is difference from Trang in that it has more traffic jam and air toxic. Its to make me get up early in the morning, because I wait for a bus to go to university. And the second thing, I have more expense than before, so I have to plans to save money. I think that changes is it a good resulf for myself, because it make me feel more masculine, more responsible, and I feel that I have more adult too. I think, I had learnd so many, It is a great experience for me. And I thak you for myfriends who assist me all times, when I sad or uncomfortable. Therefore, we should live on correct, which it is benefit to themselves and other people. And it would the presidency changs in life.
 

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